ࡱ > 7 bjbjUU "b 7| 7| l jP jP jP 8 P \ P L R $ BS " dS dS dS dS S , T x z z z z z z $ E e ~ *T dS dS *T *T ` dS dS ` ` ` *T dS dS x ` *T x ` ` 6h N D dS R `AL= J jP @Z p 8 0 D 4 ɞ 0 h ` D ` ISO/IEC JTC 1 SC 24 N 2549 ISO/IEC JTC 1/SC 24/WG 8 N0341 COLLATION OF COMMENTS - ISO/IEC CD 18023-2 Information technology Computer graphics SEDRIS Part 2: Abstract transmittal format US NB Position on ISO/IEC Committee Draft 18023-2 The US votes to approve ISO/IEC CD 18023-2 with the following comments: General US_G001: Check entire document for formatting. Some clauses have the words justified such as the Introduction and some of them have the words aligned left. The document shall be formatted per ISO/IEC directives with regard to justification and formatting. . US_G002: Throughout the document the reference to the other Parts of 18023 are made inconsistently. Some time Part X of this International Standard is used other times Part X of 18023 is used as well as 18023-X. Refer to the directives for proper referencing of other parts of 18023 and make the hyperlinks referring to 18023 consistent. US_G003: On the Index Page under scope; change defines the problem area to specifies the technology area that part 3 of this International Standard addresses. Similarly change all references to this International Standard to be Part 3 of this International Standard. US_G004: The first letters of the words of a phrase should be capitalized because they are indicating the letters used for the acronym such as, application program interface (API) and abstract transmittal format (ATF). See Introduction for API and Clause 4 for ATF. Research the ISO/IEC directives. Follow directives on capitalization of acronyms and abbreviations. Apply consistent usage throughout this International Standard. Technical Foreword US_T001: Problem: 5th paragraph has the words, Further parts will follow. Are these required by ISO? If not, this is not an accurate statement. There are not any more standards being proposed for the SEDRIS Technology. The word will implies there are other SEDRIS Technologies that will follow in this series. Recommendation: If this sentence has to remain, the word should be changed to may. This also makes the wording similar to that in 18023-1. Clause 2: Normative References US_T002: Problem: Do not see use of ISO/IEC 10641 Recommendation: If not used, remove from Normative References Clause 4: Concepts US_T003: Figure 4.1 Problem: The diagram incorrectly shows the expansion of the ith component. The lower dotted line between the middle and right hand components of the figure be connect to the lower boundary of "Data Object 1" or should both the upper and lower dotted lines be associated with the unlabeled Data Object below Data Object 1? The latter would be consistent with the rest of the figure. Recommendation: Fix appropriately. US_T004: 4.2.3 Role, last sentence Problem: Other encodings do not provide other "ATF representations" but "representation that are complaint with the ATF". Recommendation: Reword sentence as follows: "Other encodings are allowed and would provide ATF complaint representations for their own purposes (see 6.3 Conformance of private encodings)." Clause 6: Conformance US_T005: Problem: There is not any statement regarding conformance of other transmittals or standard encodings Recommendation: Add such a statement. Editorial Index US_E001: index.html page, SEDRIS logo Change the html source reference to the SEDRIS logo from sedris.gif to SEDRIS.gif to match the actual SEDRIS logo filename. The logo appears when viewed locally, but currently does not appear when viewed across the SEDRIS web site, because the SEDRIS web site is case-sensitive to filename references. US_E002: All file headers Make the SEDRIS logo appear the same size in all files (the logo in the index.html page and the Scope clause are larger than all others). Most files currently take a 200 x 200 pixel logo and shrink it to 131 x 131 pixels, which makes the logo blurred and irregular around the edges. If required, request the appropriate size logo for use from the SEDRIS organization. Appropriate SEDRIS logos are available in the following sizes (which should not be reduced in size when used): 75 x 75, 150 x 150, 200 x 200. US_E003: index.html file, 1st paragraph Correct the typographical error Computer graphicsa and to read Computer graphics and. US_E004: index.html file, last sentence Correct the typographical error encodings?provides to read encodings provides. US_E005: Title Page Add period to end of first sentence after table. Starts with "The Foreword" Introduction US_E006: Introduction, Design Goals 1st sentence Remove "defined" at end of sentence. US_E007: Introduction The list in the Introduction contains sentences and should follow the ISO/IEC directives about their construction. Foreword US_E008: Foreword, 3rd paragraph Change the hyperlink under HYPERLINK "http://www.vrml.org/" http://www.sedris.org to point to http://www.sedris.org rather than to http://www.vrml.org. Clause 2: Normative References US_E009: 2, table Correct the last entry in the Reference column to make the text consistent. It uses a different size font, and is left-aligned differently, than the other entries in this column of the table. Clause 3: Definitions US_E010: 3.8 Correct the font used for this terms definition. The definition employs a header font style, rather than the font style for a text paragraph. Clause 4: Concepts US_E011: Table 4.1 Correct all the hyperlinks in this table. None of them work. Clause 5: Transmittal Structure US_E012: Table 5.1 Correct spelling and capitalization by changing HYPERLINK \l "ExternalElementGrammar"5.2.2 Extternal Element Grammar to read HYPERLINK \l "ExternalElementGrammar"5.2.2 External element grammar . US_E013: 5.2.1 Change the typographical error . Replace the ending . with a >. US_E014: 5.2.9 In
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